Random Thoughts from a 24 year old recent college grad exploring sexuality and life along the way.
Monday, January 26, 2009
Spot the errors
This 8 1/2'' x 11'' advertisement was surrounding our newspaper this morning. Now Curves usually isn't a place I'd check out, so normally I'd just skip over the ad, but I couldn't get past all of the errors in this ad. Can you spot them?
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I'm a journalism major--I am big on grammar. It lacks flow. And there are some serious punctuation issues going on there.
Well... here's what I picked out that bothered me: - Capitalization of Receive, but not will - Solutiuon - Peolpe - random capitalization/non-capitalization - not capitalizing the "your" in the box - the random/inconsistent exclamation marks - I would have phrased it "30 day free trial on curvescomplete.com- a complete solution to managing your weight." - "For $20 you will receive unlimited access to our facility, which will be refunded after full completion of study."
4 comments:
I'm a journalism major--I am big on grammar. It lacks flow. And there are some serious punctuation issues going on there.
what are "peolpe" - sounds spanish...
peolpe => people
solutiuon => solution
Any others? (Other than general grammar painfulness.)
Well... here's what I picked out that bothered me:
- Capitalization of Receive, but not will
- Solutiuon
- Peolpe
- random capitalization/non-capitalization
- not capitalizing the "your" in the box
- the random/inconsistent exclamation marks
- I would have phrased it "30 day free trial on curvescomplete.com- a complete solution to managing your weight."
- "For $20 you will receive unlimited access to our facility, which will be refunded after full completion of study."
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